Jargon In Essay Writing

A very technical kind of writing it is not trying to impress you with a lot of things with the plenty of jargon it is all very technical kind of vocabulary and basic minimal use of linking words but effectively used in the high school dropout a second paragraph or in there in that particular essay you have a wide range of linking words and signal words but that’s the demand of that kind of a passage here persistent use or continuous use of and an R and N and R and also okay should be enough they nothing that a writer can actually do to do this kind of or to write this kind of description but in that one in the previous passage a writer can so that’s the difference however you as writers I would strongly suggest that expand your vocabulary and try to use a variety of markers and signals and linking words in your writing.

Now here is an exercise for you extract is quite analytical please look at the slide this is your exercise fill in the blanks with linking words thinking about society using surveillance as a concept enables us to mount an ethical social and special critique of the information processing practices – a part of the way society is formed governed and managed here you have to fill in a reference word it enables us to question and evidence its impact on the social fabric on discrimination trust accountability transparency access to services mobility freedoms community and social justice – it enables us to engage in debates with regulators businesses and journalists about the consequences of their surveillance based activities – instead of thinking about surveillance as a single all-knowing oppressive force as George Orwell depicts in the novel 1984 we prefer to think of it as something which is woven into everyday life and that is more complex and multi-layered the Kobalt high-tech world of the spy of the all-seeing evil despots are – tiny aspects of the surveillance society begin – by thinking about the many different activities in which we engage during the course of a single day at different times we interact with surveillance as part of these activities.

Workers performance information is collected by the organizations for which we work managers use that information to let us know how we are performing in our jobs and how we can improve in future I would like you to discuss this exercise and do this exercise in pairs or in groups small groups of course and choose a variety of signal words perhaps you can think of more words then that the S actually uses okay so here’s the answer answer list the first was which moreover so but for example as the full text is given on this particular link but I would still want you to approach the SI all over again a passage sorry all over again and see if you can come up with a different set of answers the answer that I have shown are taken from the text itself but if you think that you can come up with a different list different answers please give it a try and see if you’re writing reads better.